COTW spoiler angst

[serafina20]

Okay, I've spent about 50 pages on Lionel bugging Lex's office. There was major angst issues with both the boys that had to be explored. I'll reread it to make sure it flows, but it seems to, so I doubt I'll cut it down.

I've spend 10 pages getting Martha and Lionel to Metrpolis, having Lex give the order for Kern and his men to bug the office, and causing Martha and Jonathan to fight. It had to be a different fight than the show, because having them fight over her obligations to Lionel and her husband while her son was regressing to an eleven year old state seemed silly. It made much more sense for them to fight over Clark with martha revealign her anxieties over losing her son to his partner.

My problem is this: i've gotten all the players in place. Martha and Lionel are being held hostage; Lex and Clark have the helicopter ready for JOnathan to turn it down. He can't turn it down for the same reasons as in the show, so as he's doing it, they get the call about the hostage situation. Clark takes off, Jonathan and Lex head off for Metropolis and...

It feels like the end of the fic. Yeah, I haven't taken it through the episode, but I see no real reason to rehash what happened in Insurgance, becasue I've set up what's changed yet don't feel that there'a a need to rewrite every scene accordingly. I'd much rather leave it where it is and then pick it back up with Suspect, but...

Is it a cliff hanger if I leave it like that?

I may have to ask for an audience for advice. I'll reread it tomorrow or this weekend to see my second impressions, but I think I will need a fresh set of eyes. Any volunteers?

Comments

[obsidian-rai.livejournal.com]

*raises hand* Sure, I'll volunteer. And it kind of is a cliffhanger but not like if the show left off like that. We all know what happened and in my opinion, since you will be continuing the series, it would work to leave it like that. *smiles* Just my two cents.

[shattered.livejournal.com]

yet don't feel that there'a a need to rewrite every scene accordingly. I'd much rather leave it where it is and then pick it back up with Suspect

I haven't read it of course, but I think this is a wise move. I imagine it could be very easy to slip into a pattern of rewriting *every* scene, when of course the characterizations and mirrored episodes can stand just fine on their own without each and every details being reworked.

Hope that helps.:-)

[pepperjackcandy.livejournal.com]

End the fic there (making it sound like an ending, and not like you just stopped, of course), and reinforce that the final events were the same in the next fic. Like by having Lex refer to the frustration of the custodial staff over the broken window.

[amandajane5.livejournal.com]

I'll volunteer to beta, but I think you're right with leaving the episode as is and just go with the leading up to.

[soft-princess.livejournal.com]

Me!

*bounce*

I'll happily look it over for you. ;-)